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Well I have several people showing up this chapter. Tell me what you think.
1.1 Was short  but future chapter will be longer.  I also thought about doing a lot of short ones with constant updates. If you have a picture you want me to include please post it here.

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[s]Wolfboy - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/wolfie.jpg
Swordmaster - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/SM.jpg
Ryu - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/Ryu.jpg
Roli -http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/Roli.jpg
Cafe maid - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/maid.jpg
Majesty -http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/lunamajesty.jpg
Bunder - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/bunder.jpg
Oldman - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/oldman.jpg
What? - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/Whatavi.jpg
Puhi - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/Puhi.jpg
Adrea - http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f323/DarkRobot/Adrea.jpg[/s]

Edited by What?, 03 April 2014 - 07:10 AM.

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[10:09:03 PM] Kiri: Gah, What?'s poor spelling is contagious!
[10:09:18 PM] Kiri: It is spreading throughout the lands of Draconis. Soon we shall have an epidemic on our hands.
[10:09:28 PM] CompleteZero: Worse than the banana plague too
[10:09:52 PM] CompleteZero: 'Notable Events'

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[6:55:21 PM] Robert Joe: What?, you are not Jenna. You are supposed to eat the Stawberries, not people.


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lol, I like the oldschool avatars.

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I'm really excited to see where this will go! :)

Also, dat onigiri... Does it have a name?

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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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I like how What? now has no money and Adrea doesnt have any food anymore, assuming it was hers. I feel Phui is troubled, I mean what would turn a child to thievery other than desperation or some Oliver Twist Jazz? I like this story so far.
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All i have to say is: Oh My Jon.


This is brilliant.

Use a Panda for my picture when i show up. xD
Or a bamboo. Dem bamboos.

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Well a second update early to do a little development

View PostButternut Squash, on 18 April 2013 - 03:35 PM, said:

I'm really excited to see where this will go! :)

Also, dat onigiri... Does it have a name?

I hope not. I ate it


View PostSoriya, on 18 April 2013 - 04:01 PM, said:

All i have to say is: Oh My Jon.


This is brilliant.

Use a Panda for my picture when i show up. xD
Or a bamboo. Dem bamboos.
:P

View PostDave, on 18 April 2013 - 08:10 AM, said:

lol, I like the oldschool avatars.
Me too

View PostZack, on 18 April 2013 - 03:51 PM, said:

I like how What? now has no money and Adrea doesnt have any food anymore, assuming it was hers. I feel Phui is troubled, I mean what would turn a child to thievery other than desperation or some Oliver Twist Jazz? I like this story so far.
You will see

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[10:09:03 PM] Kiri: Gah, What?'s poor spelling is contagious!
[10:09:18 PM] Kiri: It is spreading throughout the lands of Draconis. Soon we shall have an epidemic on our hands.
[10:09:28 PM] CompleteZero: Worse than the banana plague too
[10:09:52 PM] CompleteZero: 'Notable Events'

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[6:55:21 PM] Robert Joe: What?, you are not Jenna. You are supposed to eat the Stawberries, not people.


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EPIC.

I seriously love this new update! I wonder if hearts can come out of broken pots too. u_u; You're getting people down pretty well.

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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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Hahaha! This is priceless.

Also, I am totes the Emperor of Bryutannia, yo. It has Ryu in the name.
In space, the stars are paved with gold.

No, really, who is Ryu Gaia?

Will anybody tell me?

Does anybody know?


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I still think it's Dave or even Rei. Then again, I can only guess at what What? is thinking.

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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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Haha I like your theories.

Fun fact about the latest episode:
-Half of what ryu said was actually quotes by Ryu
-I referenced the old ToS series and the writer

Next episode will be a bit harder to write so I will try to release it tonight. If not tomorrow.  I will finish this chapter soon. in the next 2 episodes. After that it will be on a short haitius for plot planning if I can't think of how to pursue it from there.

I might post some up charater avis here for fun

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[10:09:03 PM] Kiri: Gah, What?'s poor spelling is contagious!
[10:09:18 PM] Kiri: It is spreading throughout the lands of Draconis. Soon we shall have an epidemic on our hands.
[10:09:28 PM] CompleteZero: Worse than the banana plague too
[10:09:52 PM] CompleteZero: 'Notable Events'

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[6:55:21 PM] Robert Joe: What?, you are not Jenna. You are supposed to eat the Stawberries, not people.


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Is it okay if we use the avatars released to write our own spin-offs? I'm not confirming that I will do it, but... it's been a while since I've written a crackfic...

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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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View PostPatsy Dragon, on 19 April 2013 - 09:30 PM, said:

Is it okay if we use the avatars released to write our own spin-offs? I'm not confirming that I will do it, but... it's been a while since I've written a crackfic...

Hmmm... I will allow it under the two condition.:
1. If it is unrelated spin offs, We have a dedicated topic for all spin off  and you allow all members to contribute to it. Title it: A New Tale of GSAR Fan Fic topic

2. If you want it as an offical related spin off. Wait till the end of the chapter to understand the plot a little more. And I will help you create the world they are in. It should be titled A New Tale of GSAR Official spinoff: [Put title here]

I stand for all creativity. ^__^

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[10:09:03 PM] Kiri: Gah, What?'s poor spelling is contagious!
[10:09:18 PM] Kiri: It is spreading throughout the lands of Draconis. Soon we shall have an epidemic on our hands.
[10:09:28 PM] CompleteZero: Worse than the banana plague too
[10:09:52 PM] CompleteZero: 'Notable Events'

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[6:55:21 PM] Robert Joe: What?, you are not Jenna. You are supposed to eat the Stawberries, not people.


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...Might I ask where this story is held?
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Here: http://www.gs-adepts...w-tale-of-gsar/

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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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Thanks.  I'm crazy out of character, what with not being antagonistic towards Ryu and the whole "being straight" thing, but other than that it's a fun read so far.
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Well, they did say that his voice would turn straight men gay, so that wouldn't be too odd.

Anyways, I'm enjoying this. It's really weird in a fun way.

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[4/17/15,10:18:32 PM] Zack: and maybe out if you want

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Au contraire, mon merc. Or something like that. For you see...

It turns Strait men gay.

Eh, eh? Come on, that's an appropriate joke about the minor spelling errors. (Shameless plug for me editing the spelling and such~)

Moving on, I do think it's quite funny, and salute What?, exactly? Yeesh, if Pizza makes me so punny...

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Sorry guys,  it did not feel right to have a battle yet. You will see them in chapter 2. I posted the Avi links as requested. Next one will finally set everything up for the rest of the story.

Major story edit:

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Reason: Joke was way to  complicated and confusing. I am sorry for the edit

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[10:09:03 PM] Kiri: Gah, What?'s poor spelling is contagious!
[10:09:18 PM] Kiri: It is spreading throughout the lands of Draconis. Soon we shall have an epidemic on our hands.
[10:09:28 PM] CompleteZero: Worse than the banana plague too
[10:09:52 PM] CompleteZero: 'Notable Events'

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[6:55:21 PM] Robert Joe: What?, you are not Jenna. You are supposed to eat the Stawberries, not people.


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How will Ryu spend his vacation?

Rockets, mountain dew, freedom ladies, with all of this taking place in space.
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"... but you can love completely without complete understanding." -Reverend Maclean, from "The River Runs Through It" (movie)

"grumble grumble stinkhead grumble grumble poop-for-snot grumble grumble dick" -Ryu Gaia

"Puhi gave the people food and made the seaweed farm."

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Wait... could it be?  The Magesty is... My darling♥?!
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